I’ve taken a bit of a hiatus from this blog due to planning a trip to UK with my son Nov 16 to Nov 26. However, I have a few scraps of time to begin my second project from the Storytelling Manual, entitled “Let’s Get Personal”. The objectives are as follows:
- To learn the elements of a good story (& give it life with description & dialog)
- To create and tell an original story based on a personal experience
- Time: Six to eight minutes.
The topic that I am playing with at the moment is on my first day in Japan when I was in my early 20’s. I want to explore the impact of culture shock and the overwhelming feeling of adventure that accompanies such an adventure.
A big tricky here will be to not drag in too much detail or go on a tangent and possibly loose my audience. That trip had so many elements to it and I am worried I will try to weave to many in. However, a personal story is very difficult to edit and keep focused because it all matters to me even if some of the details may not matter to my audience. Will have to rely on others to help me with the prime directive of any effective presentation: first serve thy audience.
In other words, I have to make the impact not about me even though the topic is all about me.
Thinking of starting with a triad/quadra hook opening:
“Young Buck. Fresh off Plane. Bright lights, big city. Hungry like hippo. First Meal? Golden Arches.”
My intent is to use short, punchy, descriptive sentences to aggressively garner audience attention while vividly planting a dynamic setting.
What do you think? Will this hit the mark? Is it too cryptic? Your feedback and suggestions, especially dissentful ones will be most helpful and appreciated.